>Xenos: We want to destroy your homeworld to make a highway for our convenience. >Humanity: Fack off >Xenos: *Pushes into human space and lands on Earth* Silence >*Before the sound of Thunder could be heard an unusual music can be heard in the air* >Humanity laughing maniacally to sabaton: WELCOME TO EARTH
@TNASTY6688846993 the instant they hit the edge of the solar system, they would've come under fire by the Segmentum Solar battlefleet and the elements of the absurdly massive sol defense systems. There would be no xeno ship left to warn away.
@@chaplaingilgamesh2964. And they would either have to deal with the Lucifer blacks and custodes, or the mechanicus’s best depending on which planet they landed on, either way, they would not survive
I'm always glad to find more HFY story narrations, but you really should link to the original text in the description if you can. It's always good to credit the authors when possible. I know some other narrators even contact them to ask if it's okay to read their stories. Keep it up and thanks for the storytime!
@@sin-text857 Yeah i kind of guessed that, because i felt like you sometimes added to your script on the fly. It was a bit rough but goddamn those were brutal scenes you were describing.
Like and comment for the algorithm Constructive criticism: Great story, great thumbnail(why I clicked), and great title. Things to improve/work on: A pop shield/filter would do wonders for the audio quality, it sounds like you lose confidence when you stumble on your words, dont be afraid to redo sections and piece them together, rehearse your lines so you can get the proper emotion/inflection youre going for, I can hear you trying to put emphasis or emotion on certain parts but not fully commiting to it or backing of mid sentence. Again youve got a great reading voice, keep working on your execution. Youve got a lot of great things going for you and i dont doubt youll continue to improve! Nothing but love! Keep working hard amigo
@Cannabis Dreams as someone who's done a bit of public speaking it's far easier to say your own words than someone else's. His stories are good but his narrations suck.
Also, redo sections until you stop stumbling and pausing at hard words. It gets better with experience, as you will start to read faster than you talk and prepare the sounds in your mind.
HFY narration that's not british woo! not that I dont like them or anything its just the most common thing. Tip/criticism: Slow down and breathe we're in no rush. To my ears it sounds like we have something in common while narrating which is going unintentionally monotone. There is still inflection and volume changes sure, but the note stays the same. This is the most apparent during combat as, either consciously or not, the pace of speech clearly goes up as does the tension in the voice BUT it winds up sounding like there is a ton of energy that just can't get out. Slow down and breathe. The advice given to me to help with this: Do it as if you are on stage at a theatre delivering a main characters soliloquy. Which for me means do it as physically animated/invested as possible, ESPECIALLY in the face. It's very easy to hear facial expressions or lack thereof. Slow down and breathe you're doing great!
You are correct, and I will try to emote more while narrating. Though I do have to point out that when I take a breath I tend to pause too much. I have received a lot of criticism on it. FYI, the reason I speed up during the combat portions is to emphasize the combat itself. Since combat itself, at least on the ground, it VERY fast I try to hit on that. However, I will truly take your criticism under advisement.
@@sin-text857 ah I see. Clarifications on my part then explained: the slow down and breathe wasn't intended as literal. The speed (by) itself wasn't meant as a negative either thought I can fully see why it came off that way. -sdab- I saw another comment that already gave avenues and solutions about it so I summed my view up with slow down and breathe. It(the comment) was the one about multiple takes, cuts etc. I've seen how feral ppl can get over some minor stuff but just always remember: you can't please everyone as there will be 1 who will not be. -speed- So, I'm totally on board with it as a tool to convey the frenetic feeling or pace. The reason I picked it out is that its, to me at least, the easiest to recognize any habits, faults, or quirks and self critique. It's also 1 of the 2 best areas to look at to see how well you are controlling and utilizing the air in your lungs and the timing of your breaths. Singers/vocalists (the charismatic voice says a bit about it on their video of "the pot" or "sober" iirc) are the best source for the detailed info on that. Easiest way to see how drastic the difference your face, and only your face, makes: say "I hate you and I hope you die" or "i love you with all my heart" with an angry expression and then say it with a smile. CSR for walmart.com and a bank taught me that little nugget lmao
Is there any chance you could put in a link to the text of the story? While I appreciate the narration I personally prefer to read a story for myself as I'm slightly deaf and find it much easier.
You have my apologies as there is no text for most of my content. I create everything on this channel myself so that there is no overlap with other channels. The only thing written down are some notes and an outline.
Sorry about that. I have been working on the audio settings, and I think I have it fixed. FYI, the humming was the computer. I still don't know why it does that, but I am working on dampening it.
This story applies details in a broken and jarring manner. Some of the details are unnecessary and best left to the imagination. It is also unnecessary to give a detail then repeat the detail with additional descriptors. This feels like a story that was written for an English class and additional unnecessary and story flow breaking details were added just to meet a required word count.
>Xenos: We want to destroy your homeworld to make a highway for our convenience.
>Humanity: Fack off
>Xenos: *Pushes into human space and lands on Earth*
Silence
>*Before the sound of Thunder could be heard an unusual music can be heard in the air*
>Humanity laughing maniacally to sabaton: WELCOME TO EARTH
They are the panzer elite!
Attack of the Dead Men
beautiful
Tbh- I feel like they had a missed opportunity to reply back to the council ships with a good ol "go fuck yourself"
21:23 And that's when the dead men are marching again.
You are the first person to get that part. Congrats!
That phrase sounds like a line in a song from Sabaton.
Attack of the dead 100 men!!
@@johnshaddick6858 it is
«I get knocked down, but I get up again, you never gonna keep me down!»
Apparently Doom Guy was there general
I guess the landing force didn't hear the Boss Music playing when they touched down, huh?
Xenos councils: NEVER trust them to listen to reason without an ass-kicking.
If it's not instantly lethal or doesn't knock us unconscious, a sufficiently angry or dedicated human will keep fighting.
The aliens sounded like they attacked the Space marines and the Death Korp or Krieg soldiers, from 40K War hammer.
And threatened Holy Terra no less
Not really, they wouldn't have been allowed to leave the forat time of it were the Imperium of Man
@TNASTY6688846993 the instant they hit the edge of the solar system, they would've come under fire by the Segmentum Solar battlefleet and the elements of the absurdly massive sol defense systems. There would be no xeno ship left to warn away.
@@chaplaingilgamesh2964. And they would either have to deal with the Lucifer blacks and custodes, or the mechanicus’s best depending on which planet they landed on, either way, they would not survive
I'm always glad to find more HFY story narrations, but you really should link to the original text in the description if you can. It's always good to credit the authors when possible. I know some other narrators even contact them to ask if it's okay to read their stories. Keep it up and thanks for the storytime!
Well that is an easy fix... Hi, I AM the author of the original story.
@@sin-text857 Yeah i kind of guessed that, because i felt like you sometimes added to your script on the fly. It was a bit rough but goddamn those were brutal scenes you were describing.
Molon Labe. Come and Take
Anyone else getting "Attack of the Dead Men" vibes? xD
*WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!*
Like and comment for the algorithm
Constructive criticism:
Great story, great thumbnail(why I clicked), and great title.
Things to improve/work on:
A pop shield/filter would do wonders for the audio quality, it sounds like you lose confidence when you stumble on your words, dont be afraid to redo sections and piece them together, rehearse your lines so you can get the proper emotion/inflection youre going for, I can hear you trying to put emphasis or emotion on certain parts but not fully commiting to it or backing of mid sentence.
Again youve got a great reading voice, keep working on your execution. Youve got a lot of great things going for you and i dont doubt youll continue to improve!
Nothing but love! Keep working hard amigo
He says they're his stories but it sounds like he's never read it before. 🤔
@Cannabis Dreams as someone who's done a bit of public speaking it's far easier to say your own words than someone else's. His stories are good but his narrations suck.
This. I like the stories, but better audio quality would make it much better.
Also, redo sections until you stop stumbling and pausing at hard words.
It gets better with experience, as you will start to read faster than you talk and prepare the sounds in your mind.
lol shaked and baked into the ground HA
HFY narration that's not british woo! not that I dont like them or anything its just the most common thing.
Tip/criticism: Slow down and breathe we're in no rush.
To my ears it sounds like we have something in common while narrating which is going unintentionally monotone. There is still inflection and volume changes sure, but the note stays the same. This is the most apparent during combat as, either consciously or not, the pace of speech clearly goes up as does the tension in the voice BUT it winds up sounding like there is a ton of energy that just can't get out. Slow down and breathe.
The advice given to me to help with this: Do it as if you are on stage at a theatre delivering a main characters soliloquy. Which for me means do it as physically animated/invested as possible, ESPECIALLY in the face. It's very easy to hear facial expressions or lack thereof.
Slow down and breathe you're doing great!
You are correct, and I will try to emote more while narrating. Though I do have to point out that when I take a breath I tend to pause too much. I have received a lot of criticism on it. FYI, the reason I speed up during the combat portions is to emphasize the combat itself. Since combat itself, at least on the ground, it VERY fast I try to hit on that. However, I will truly take your criticism under advisement.
@@sin-text857 ah I see. Clarifications on my part then explained: the slow down and breathe wasn't intended as literal. The speed (by) itself wasn't meant as a negative either thought I can fully see why it came off that way.
-sdab-
I saw another comment that already gave avenues and solutions about it so I summed my view up with slow down and breathe. It(the comment) was the one about multiple takes, cuts etc. I've seen how feral ppl can get over some minor stuff but just always remember: you can't please everyone as there will be 1 who will not be.
-speed-
So, I'm totally on board with it as a tool to convey the frenetic feeling or pace. The reason I picked it out is that its, to me at least, the easiest to recognize any habits, faults, or quirks and self critique. It's also 1 of the 2 best areas to look at to see how well you are controlling and utilizing the air in your lungs and the timing of your breaths. Singers/vocalists (the charismatic voice says a bit about it on their video of "the pot" or "sober" iirc) are the best source for the detailed info on that.
Easiest way to see how drastic the difference your face, and only your face, makes: say "I hate you and I hope you die" or "i love you with all my heart" with an angry expression and then say it with a smile. CSR for walmart.com and a bank taught me that little nugget lmao
Is there any chance you could put in a link to the text of the story? While I appreciate the narration I personally prefer to read a story for myself as I'm slightly deaf and find it much easier.
You have my apologies as there is no text for most of my content. I create everything on this channel myself so that there is no overlap with other channels. The only thing written down are some notes and an outline.
@@sin-text857 Ok Sin. Thanks anyway.
@@danielryan4050 use the auto text.
@@MercenaryX21 UA-cam captions are trash.
come and take
You need to adjust your pop-filter so the P's doesn't blast the mic.
I'll get right on that.
i wany more
mic popping is killing my ears:( also is that a vacuum cleaner or what?
Sorry about that. I have been working on the audio settings, and I think I have it fixed. FYI, the humming was the computer. I still don't know why it does that, but I am working on dampening it.
This story applies details in a broken and jarring manner. Some of the details are unnecessary and best left to the imagination. It is also unnecessary to give a detail then repeat the detail with additional descriptors. This feels like a story that was written for an English class and additional unnecessary and story flow breaking details were added just to meet a required word count.