The internet has significantly impacted on our modern lives. While offering a wide range of functions to users, the internet has changed the style of our communication dramatically with the advent of the social media. Even though negative effects remain concerned, the internet is expected to develop further and form our society in various ways. IELTSのライティングに苦戦しています💦 量をこなしていますが文章の流れを綺麗にするのが難しいです💦 mayuさんの動画いつも参考にさせていただいてます！ありがとうございます😊
ありがとうございます！IETLSも頑張ってください🔥 添削しました👍 The internet has significantly impacted our modern lives. While offering a wide range of functions, it has dramatically changed the way we communicate, especially with the advent of social media. Although negative effects remain a concern, the internet is expected to continue developing and shape our society in various ways.
These days, the internet has a significant role in this society. It enables people to connect, prevail information. Although it also has some detrimental effects with it like health problems, invasion of privacy, and prevailing misinformation, the internet will result in growing. 要約出来なさすぎて、お時間あれば添削してくださると嬉しいです。英検の添削で絶望してた時にこの動画見れてマジで生きてて良かったです。頑張ります！
英検頑張ってください！！ ワードチョイスのレベルが高くて、勉強しているのがひしひしと伝わってきました💪 そこまで難しい表現を使うよりもナチュラルさにフォーカスをして、添削しました！ These days, the internet plays a significant role in society. It enables people to connect and share information. Although it also has some negative effects, such as health problems, privacy invasion, and the spread of misinformation, the internet is likely to continue growing.
Hi, Mayu- san. I often watch your Instagram and I was surprised by this question. I tried it! The internet has become more viral than ever these days. It has many positive merits, for example, communicating instantly, sharing information and accessing contents easily. On the other hands, it is said that it has negative points, such as addiction, privacy problems and miss information. However, the internet has already been a position of infrastructure like water, gas and electricity supply.
添削しました！細かい部分確認してみてください👍 The internet has become more pervasive than ever these days. It has many positive aspects, such as enabling instant communication, sharing information, and easily accessing content. On the other hand, it is also said to have negative aspects, such as addiction, privacy issues, and misinformation. However, the internet has already become an essential infrastructure, akin to water, gas, and electricity.
Thesedays the internet goes viral. Using the Internet makes people communicate easily and it leads to change the way to associate with people. All the same the Internet has a negative impact, it has been growing in many methods. Mayuさん！いつも素敵な動画をありがとうございます。1月に英検準一級を受ける予定なので、参考にさせていただきます！添削、お願いします。これからも応援してます！！
ありがとうございます！！英検頑張ってくださいね🔥🔥 間違って覚えている表現がありそうなので、英検対策本などの模範解答を自分で書き写して表現を覚えたりする練習も効果がありそうです👍 These days, the internet has become pervasive. Using the internet makes communication easier and has changed the way people interact with one another. At the same time, while the internet has a negative impact, it continues to grow in many ways.
In recent years the internet has become considered a necessary tool of our life. It has a lot of advantages. On the other hand it has disadvantages as well. So it is important to use the internet in an appropriate way for our better future. 英検近いので添削お願いします！！
とても良いと思います！カンマがあると読みやすいです👍 In recent years, the internet has become a necessary part of our lives. It has a lot of advantages, but it also has its drawbacks. Therefore, it is important to use the internet responsibly for a better future.
僕は個人的に要約得意なんですけど以内より以上の方が大得意です！😅 The Internet is an essential part of modern life, allowing us to communicate, share information, and access entertainment and educational content. The rise of social media has transformed the way we interact with each other, but it also brings with it negative aspects such as addiction, privacy issues, and the spread of misinformation.
the internet has become a vital part of modern life.With the increase of social media, the internet has also tranformed the way people interact with each other.However,theinternet can also have negative influences. in spite of these challenges,the internet remain to develop and shape sociaty in many ways. お忙しいと思いますが、添削お願いします！！🙇♀️
流れ良く書けていると思います👏 スペルミス、ピリオドやカンマの後のスペースがなかったりがいくつかあるので、確認してみてください！ The internet has become a vital part of modern life. With the rise of social media, it has also transformed the way people interact with each other. However, the internet can also have negative influences. In spite of these challenges, the internet continues to develop and shape society in many ways.
The internet has been developed significantly in recent years. As it grows, people can have access to do many things online and our behavior has been changed by social media. However, the internet also has disadvantages that it is hard to use properly. In spite of this, it is thriving perpetually. お忙しいとは思いますが、どうか添削よろしくお願いいたします🙇 突然ですが、来年度のアメリカ🇺🇸長期留学合格しました！まゆさんのおかげです😭まゆさんという最高のロールモデルがいらっしゃることで僕もがんばれます！いつも楽しいコンテンツをありがとうございます！
合格おめでとうございます！！！！！ えええそんな嬉しいです🥺🥺 努力の結果だと思いますので、留学中もめげずに頑張ってください🔥🔥 全体的により自然な文章になるように添削しました👍 The internet has developed significantly in recent years. As it grows, people can access many things online, and our behavior has been influenced by social media. However, the internet also has disadvantages, such as the difficulty in using it properly. Despite this, it continues to thrive.
The internet is an indispensable part of modern life and helps people today communicate, share information, and savor entertaining or educational materials. It will certainly be developing in the future though it may entail some woes such as addiction, privacy concerns, and spreading false information. いい感じに書けました
表現が洗練されていて、素晴らしいと思います！！ 強いて言うならになりますが、 savorは食べ物に使うことが多いので、enjoy entertainment or educational contentがより自然だと思います👍 あとは、以下のようにすることで、よりニュアンスが伝わると思いました！ It will certainly be developing → It will undoubtedly continue to develop spreading false information → the spread of misinformation
Nowadays, the internet has become a significant part of our lives, allowing us to connect with people instantly and access any content we like. That being said, we must consider how using the internet can negatively affect our behavior in real life. いつも楽しくチャンネル拝見させていただいています！お忙しいと思いますが、ぜひ添削をお願いします！
可愛すぎるのに英語も出来るとかマジで尊敬してます！
The Most Awesomest Teacher
英検の参考にさせてもらいます
The internet has significantly impacted on our modern lives. While offering a wide range of functions to users, the internet has changed the style of our communication dramatically with the advent of the social media. Even though negative effects remain concerned, the internet is expected to develop further and form our society in various ways.
IELTSのライティングに苦戦しています💦 量をこなしていますが文章の流れを綺麗にするのが難しいです💦 mayuさんの動画いつも参考にさせていただいてます！ありがとうございます😊
ありがとうございます！IETLSも頑張ってください🔥
添削しました👍
The internet has significantly impacted our modern lives. While offering a wide range of functions, it has dramatically changed the way we communicate, especially with the advent of social media. Although negative effects remain a concern, the internet is expected to continue developing and shape our society in various ways.
@ ありがとうございます😊
40歳に、なって英検3級の勉強を初めました、
コレから、参考にしていきたいと思うので、宜しくお願いします☆
日本語にある起承転結を使うとうまくまとまらないので、英語要約のテクニックが必要かもですね。
These days, the internet has a significant role in this society. It enables people to connect, prevail information. Although it also has some detrimental effects with it like health problems, invasion of privacy, and prevailing misinformation, the internet will result in growing.
要約出来なさすぎて、お時間あれば添削してくださると嬉しいです。英検の添削で絶望してた時にこの動画見れてマジで生きてて良かったです。頑張ります！
英検頑張ってください！！
ワードチョイスのレベルが高くて、勉強しているのがひしひしと伝わってきました💪
そこまで難しい表現を使うよりもナチュラルさにフォーカスをして、添削しました！
These days, the internet plays a significant role in society. It enables people to connect and share information. Although it also has some negative effects, such as health problems, privacy invasion, and the spread of misinformation, the internet is likely to continue growing.
@ お忙しい中添削してくださってありがとうございます! ナチュラルさも加えて頑張ります！！
Hi, Mayu- san. I often watch your Instagram and I was surprised by this question. I tried it!
The internet has become more viral than ever these days. It has many positive merits, for example, communicating instantly, sharing information and accessing contents easily. On the other hands, it is said that it has negative points, such as addiction, privacy problems and miss information. However, the internet has already been a position of infrastructure like water, gas and electricity supply.
添削しました！細かい部分確認してみてください👍
The internet has become more pervasive than ever these days. It has many positive aspects, such as enabling instant communication, sharing information, and easily accessing content. On the other hand, it is also said to have negative aspects, such as addiction, privacy issues, and misinformation. However, the internet has already become an essential infrastructure, akin to water, gas, and electricity.
本日もお美しいです。。。
Thesedays the internet goes viral. Using the Internet makes people communicate easily and it leads to change the way to associate with people. All the same the Internet has a negative impact, it has been growing in many methods.
Mayuさん！いつも素敵な動画をありがとうございます。1月に英検準一級を受ける予定なので、参考にさせていただきます！添削、お願いします。これからも応援してます！！
ありがとうございます！！英検頑張ってくださいね🔥🔥
間違って覚えている表現がありそうなので、英検対策本などの模範解答を自分で書き写して表現を覚えたりする練習も効果がありそうです👍
These days, the internet has become pervasive. Using the internet makes communication easier and has changed the way people interact with one another. At the same time, while the internet has a negative impact, it continues to grow in many ways.
In recent years the internet has become considered a necessary tool of our life. It has a lot of advantages. On the other hand it has disadvantages as well. So it is important to use the internet in an appropriate way for our better future.
英検近いので添削お願いします！！
とても良いと思います！カンマがあると読みやすいです👍
In recent years, the internet has become a necessary part of our lives. It has a lot of advantages, but it also has its drawbacks. Therefore, it is important to use the internet responsibly for a better future.
@ ありがとうございます！
僕は個人的に要約得意なんですけど以内より以上の方が大得意です！😅 The Internet is an essential part of modern life, allowing us to communicate, share information, and access entertainment and educational content. The rise of social media has transformed the way we interact with each other, but it also brings with it negative aspects such as addiction, privacy issues, and the spread of misinformation.
要約得意とは羨ましいです！！確かに、、でも〇語以上の要約ってあんまないですよね😢
さすがですね👏
あまり言うことないですが、with itなくてもいいかもしれないですね！
the internet has become a vital part of modern life.With the increase of social media, the internet has also tranformed the way people interact with each other.However,theinternet can also have negative influences. in spite of these challenges,the internet remain to develop and shape sociaty in many ways.
お忙しいと思いますが、添削お願いします！！🙇♀️
流れ良く書けていると思います👏
スペルミス、ピリオドやカンマの後のスペースがなかったりがいくつかあるので、確認してみてください！
The internet has become a vital part of modern life. With the rise of social media, it has also transformed the way people interact with each other. However, the internet can also have negative influences. In spite of these challenges, the internet continues to develop and shape society in many ways.
The internet has been developed significantly in recent years. As it grows, people can have access to do many things online and our behavior has been changed by social media. However, the internet also has disadvantages that it is hard to use properly. In spite of this, it is thriving perpetually.
お忙しいとは思いますが、どうか添削よろしくお願いいたします🙇
突然ですが、来年度のアメリカ🇺🇸長期留学合格しました！まゆさんのおかげです😭まゆさんという最高のロールモデルがいらっしゃることで僕もがんばれます！いつも楽しいコンテンツをありがとうございます！
合格おめでとうございます！！！！！
えええそんな嬉しいです🥺🥺
努力の結果だと思いますので、留学中もめげずに頑張ってください🔥🔥
全体的により自然な文章になるように添削しました👍
The internet has developed significantly in recent years. As it grows, people can access many things online, and our behavior has been influenced by social media. However, the internet also has disadvantages, such as the difficulty in using it properly. Despite this, it continues to thrive.
The internet is an indispensable part of modern life and helps people today communicate, share information, and savor entertaining or educational materials. It will certainly be developing in the future though it may entail some woes such as addiction, privacy concerns, and spreading false information.
いい感じに書けました
表現が洗練されていて、素晴らしいと思います！！
強いて言うならになりますが、
savorは食べ物に使うことが多いので、enjoy entertainment or educational contentがより自然だと思います👍
あとは、以下のようにすることで、よりニュアンスが伝わると思いました！
It will certainly be developing → It will undoubtedly continue to develop
spreading false information → the spread of misinformation
savorは食べ物メインなのか！なるほど〜。勉強になります、書き込んで良かった😭️
そして直してもらったとこは確かに、そちらを口にしてみると言わんとするアイデアがより明確になり伝わりやすくなりますね！輪郭が整う感じ。これも勉強になりました。2つも学ぶことがあって最高だぜ😎️
Nowadays, the internet has become a significant part of our lives, allowing us to connect with people instantly and access any content we like. That being said, we must consider how using the internet can negatively affect our behavior in real life.
いつも楽しくチャンネル拝見させていただいています！お忙しいと思いますが、ぜひ添削をお願いします！
ありがとうございます！！とてもよく書けていると思います👏👏
改善するとすれば、we likeをwe desireにすると更に他の部分のトーンに合うと思います！
@@mayueroomトーン合わせは大事ですよね！添削していただき、そしてお褒めの言葉もありがとうございます😊もっと頑張って行きます🙄