I agree this was a great story! It's also a unique twist to be able to hear what the characters are thinking. I would like to make one suggestion though. When the character is thinking put what they are thinking in parentheses like: Boyfriend: you are looking so nice tonight! Boyfriend: (what did she do just walk out of the sewer?!) Girlfriend: thank you! Just a suggestion. Like I said the story was great!!
What is it with these Mothers and Mothers-in-law in these stories that pester their daughters/daughters-in-law about grandchildren? None of my relatives and friends had this problem (thank goodness).
This was well written- original story, yay!!
Love the best friend as usual. Excellent writing as well!
I agree this was a great story! It's also a unique twist to be able to hear what the characters are thinking.
I would like to make one suggestion though. When the character is thinking put what they are thinking in parentheses like:
Boyfriend: you are looking so nice tonight!
Boyfriend: (what did she do just walk out of the sewer?!)
Girlfriend: thank you!
Just a suggestion. Like I said the story was great!!
What is it with these Mothers and Mothers-in-law in these stories that pester their daughters/daughters-in-law about grandchildren?
None of my relatives and friends had this problem (thank goodness).