You have a talent for writing original stories, and I love it. Could use some improvements on a few things, but overall you are very good at making good creepy content that stands out.
@@flashstudiosguy ok, In “the owl” when Edward tells Henry about having the diary the day of Henry’s bizarre encounter seemed a little to coincidental to be believable. Maybe have a character mention it and the other character finds it after some research. Also, it was a little strange for them to be writing in their diary while being chased and driving a train. “The newcomers” was by far my favorite you’ve done, my only gripe is that at the ending, when Toby and Percy come back and talk to Thomas, it would have been better to cut from Thomas’s scream to the end narration just because it would have made the story flow better. Overall, it’s just more of the little details than anything else. I really do like your stories because they are more macabre and original than many others. I liked that in “a crooked engine” it was more than just a ghost and in “newcomers” where it is left vague. I could honestly see someone adapting it in rws form to use tvs figures for the newcomers. I hope you continue to make new stories. As a writer myself, I have had to make several revisions because they don’t feel natural. The more you write, the better at it you get. Also, I love the idea that the way you tell the stories is by a wandering fog man. It adds to the “folklore” side of things instead of a wise engine telling a tale from their youth.
@@daylight39 Wow, those really were insightful and I thank you for your feedback. If you'd ever like to be a guest writer or a voice actor, let me know
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Wow, I have to keep watching! Thank you for this video!!
Welcome. Season Two will be in roughly one to two months
Even though I might have to wait, I can because your content is amazing and high quality
Even though I might have to wait, I can because your content is amazing and high quality
Even though I might have to wait, I can because your content is amazing and high quality
Even though I might have to wait, I can because your content is amazing and high quality
Not sure how I somehow missed this but look Gary there I am!
For real though, a great story and I’m glad to have helped out
Amazing work
As ever, thank you
You have a talent for writing original stories, and I love it. Could use some improvements on a few things, but overall you are very good at making good creepy content that stands out.
I know audio isn't great but that's the quality of some of the Actors equipment
@@flashstudiosguy I don’t have much a problem with voicing, it’s more a few writing vices. But it doesn’t subtract from any of your videos by much.
@@daylight39 Oh, I'm curious, please elaborate
@@flashstudiosguy ok, In “the owl” when Edward tells Henry about having the diary the day of Henry’s bizarre encounter seemed a little to coincidental to be believable. Maybe have a character mention it and the other character finds it after some research. Also, it was a little strange for them to be writing in their diary while being chased and driving a train. “The newcomers” was by far my favorite you’ve done, my only gripe is that at the ending, when Toby and Percy come back and talk to Thomas, it would have been better to cut from Thomas’s scream to the end narration just because it would have made the story flow better. Overall, it’s just more of the little details than anything else. I really do like your stories because they are more macabre and original than many others. I liked that in “a crooked engine” it was more than just a ghost and in “newcomers” where it is left vague. I could honestly see someone adapting it in rws form to use tvs figures for the newcomers. I hope you continue to make new stories. As a writer myself, I have had to make several revisions because they don’t feel natural. The more you write, the better at it you get. Also, I love the idea that the way you tell the stories is by a wandering fog man. It adds to the “folklore” side of things instead of a wise engine telling a tale from their youth.
@@daylight39 Wow, those really were insightful and I thank you for your feedback. If you'd ever like to be a guest writer or a voice actor, let me know
He actually sounded like he said piss ness
It’s like a demonic version of Two-Face
What’s gonna be first for next season?
' Gold Mine' which will be another China Clay Pits Twins episode that takes place in the Knapford Lead Mines.
@@flashstudiosguy when will that be posted?
@@markpatton370 Scripts are still currently in development and announcements will be made on the channel and the Discord.
Awesome
Thank you.
Wait so if the demon is on sodor will it cause an apocalypse?
As Edward said, the creature would feast on the life force of any soul it comes across.
Did James's driver seriously just say "piss-ness"
No, he said Business
@@flashstudiosguyright well it honestly sounded like he said that to me 😅
@@JohntheLNERP2 Error on the VA's part
My apologizes