(2024 Edition) Writing the GRE Issue Essay Step by Step

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  • @ashutoshjaiswal5426
    @ashutoshjaiswal5426 7 місяців тому +221

    Introduction
    • Hook (Generalization, anecdote, interesting fact, trend, quote, etc)
    o Introduces the topic (nothing more): don’t write your thesis or supporting idea here!
    • Shift to prompt
    o Makes your essay more cohesive(make it flow better); an abrupt shift to your thesis is awkward
    • Thesis (most important part of the essay…by far)
    o This baby is the boss that controls everything
    o The thesis you choose exists on a spectrum(strongly agree, mostly agree, neutral, mostly disagree, strongly disagree)
    o Greg recommends “mostly agree” or “mostly disagree”
    • Outline (tells you reader how you’re going to structure your essay)
    o Don’t neglect this bad boy; academic readers like to know what’s coming(how many reasons/examples)
    Body Paragraph (two of them)
    • Topic sentence that introduces your first reason that supports your thesis
    o It is imperative that this introduces the overall idea of the paragraph (the “controlling” idea) and that it supports your thesis. The topic is a mini thesis
    • Example
    o You need a good example here, preferably from history, politics, economics etc
    o If you can’t think of one, use a good hypothetical
    o No one wants to hear about Uncle Bob
    • Example 2(Optional)
    o All the same rules apply
    o Why 2
     Further develops the idea
     Increases word count
     Discourages “story telling”
    • Development/Explanation
    o You need to develop your idea. You need to connect the reason to the thesis. You need to explain why this matters
    o 2-3 sentence of development is good enough
    • Remember there are 2 of these!
    Concession Paragraph (counterpoint)
    • Topic sentence that introduces a counterpoint to your thesis
    o Remember this is why we "mostly" agreed or disagreed. It leaves room for nuance.
    • Example
    o Same rules apply
    • (Optional) Example 2
    o Same rules apply
    • Development/Explanation
    o Same rules apply
    Conclusion
    • Doesn't actually matter much. I mean you need it. It can't not exist.
    But all you want to do is rephrase your thesis and your supporting
    ideas and wrap this baby up.
    Your welcome!

    • @sanskritibisht5033
      @sanskritibisht5033 7 місяців тому +1

      Eg 2 is a counter eg.

    • @sanskritibisht5033
      @sanskritibisht5033 7 місяців тому +1

      Keep rechecking for spellings, readability, etc after each paragraph. Don’t,eave that till end.

    • @sanskritibisht5033
      @sanskritibisht5033 7 місяців тому +1

      Some bs for development and execution and increase word count. Generic shit.

    • @sanskritibisht5033
      @sanskritibisht5033 7 місяців тому +2

      Use easy low hanging fruit ideas. Nothing sensational needed.

    • @Fzj1kn
      @Fzj1kn 6 місяців тому

      thanks man

  • @gencilp
    @gencilp Місяць тому +13

    I watched the video twice before taking the GRE and got a 5 AWA score (155V). Thank you Greg, I really don't write UA-cam comments, but I feel like you deserve it. I most definitely wouldn't have been able to get that score otherwise.

  • @srzisanislam8114
    @srzisanislam8114 7 місяців тому +58

    I followed the strategy discussed in this video and got 4 in the awa section. Thank you gregmat.

    • @asisiris7062
      @asisiris7062 6 місяців тому +9

      Your comment inspired me. Thanks man.

  • @amartyasingh7295
    @amartyasingh7295 3 місяці тому +19

    I didn’t write a single essay before my exam. Just saw this video twice-thrice.
    Cleared the cutoff :)
    4/6

    • @Gexey2004
      @Gexey2004 3 місяці тому +1

      Hoping me too...

    • @ru2979
      @ru2979 24 дні тому

      Then you are really gifted or exceptionally talent, stop making such claims and trying to manipulate the minds of the people who are not so gifted as you are!

  • @rashmishinde7
    @rashmishinde7 7 місяців тому +18

    How are you SO GOOD at this!!? Probably not a good sign as someone studying for GRE but there are seriously no words to describe how amazing a teacher & person you are!

  • @zillaofficial4829
    @zillaofficial4829 23 дні тому +1

    Very good vid thanks Greg! Watched day before test and morning of test got 4.5

  • @gautamkhadka3983
    @gautamkhadka3983 7 місяців тому +10

    GREG. your way of explanation is awesome

  • @zhiychen1626
    @zhiychen1626 5 місяців тому +30

    Writing of the Essay
    Technological advancements have had more negative impacts on human
    interaction and relationships than positive ones.
    Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
    with the statement and explain you reasoning / or the position you take. In
    developing and supporting you position, you should consider specific examples
    of how technological advancements have affected human interaction and
    relationships.
    The past 20 years has engendered more human connectivity than all previous
    millennia of our species' existence. With SO much change in such a short period
    of time, determining whether this phenomenon has been largely positive or
    negative is difficult, if not impossible. The prompt takes the negative stance and
    argues that technological advancements have resulted in more harm than good.
    In my opinion, I mostly disaguee with this view and believe that
    technological progression has improved our connectivity and relationships
    for the following two reasons, though I do concede that recent advancements
    have unfortunately decreased our need for face-to-face connection.
    First of all. technological advancement has resulted in more benefits for our
    interconnectivity because, as species, we are no longer constrained by
    distance. For example, a Japanese 2 exchange student studying in New York City
    can communicate with her mother in Tokyo easily and effectively at no charge
    using an application like WhatsApp or Facebook. In the past, this same student would
    have had no choice but to send a letter (which might arrive three weeks later)
    or call long distance at an exorbitant rate of dollars per minute. The Earth
    is massive, and even if one were traveling at the maximum speed of a
    commercial jetliner, it would take nearly 24 hours to travel from end of the
    planet to the other. However, technology, at least from a communication point
    of view, has created a reality in which all of Earth's & billion inhabitants are
    effectively right next to each other, not constrained by distance in any
    meaningful way. The advantages of this leap cannot be overstated, from the way
    we interact with our families to the way we conduct business around the globe.
    Second of all, the progression of our technology has allowed not just for the
    ability to sustain our current relationships but also the capacity to form new
    ones and become part of distinct communities. For example, an individual from
    a small town in America might be partial to the roleplaying game Dungeons and
    Dragons and be able to cultivate this hobby a by joining a local league in a larger
    town that he discovered on the Internet. Thirty years ago, this individual would
    have found it challenging to engage with this hobby and perhaps would never
    have pursued it given the difficulty in locating likeminded peers. Humans have
    an inherent need to be part of a tribe, to be part of a group that shares their
    interests and passions. Technology makes this possible, particularly for those
    individuals with niche hobbies that are not necessarily shared by those closest to
    them. Such freedom of expression has led to millions of people thriving in life
    and finding their true callings.
    However, I do concede that technology has led to the unfortunate consequence
    of people no longer feeling the need for face-to-face interaction. For example,
    especially after the Covid-19 pandemic, millions (perhaps billions) of workers
    around the globe no longer deem it necessary to go to their office and meet their
    co-workers on a personal level. Instead, they can simply use a video
    conferencing app like Zoom or Google Meet. In addition, the phenomenon of
    "video dating" is becoming increasingly popular, where a date is conducted
    entirely online rather than at a coffee shop or restaurant. As referenced above,
    humans are extremely social animals. We have an instinctual need to be around
    other humans. Multiple studies have shown that if a human is deprived of
    contact with other members of the species, a host of physical and mental
    consequences result. Technology, in some ways, is undermining this
    evolutionary need, one that has been with us for hundreds of thousands of years.
    It is possible that we can adjust to the new paradigm, but it's doubtful that this
    adjustment can occur at the same rate of technological process. It is no surprise
    that we are seeing rising depression and anxiety levels around the world, even
    as our standards of living improve.
    In conclusion, while it is true that technological progress has eroded some of
    our connectivity, particularly our face-to-face interaction, the benefits of instant
    communication unrestricted by distance and forming connections with
    likeminded people clearly outweigh the cons.

  • @ВороновФилипп
    @ВороновФилипп 8 місяців тому +28

    Return of the King!

  • @hlaingmyintaung1068
    @hlaingmyintaung1068 3 місяці тому

    GOAT. Thanks much. I have no idea how to start preparing AW and this videos literallyt helped me to get through all the essentials ideas and template formula that i need to stick with. Thanks much :)

  • @achakrabarty1115
    @achakrabarty1115 8 місяців тому +57

    Gregmat, your old videos were a saviour! Please re-upload them in this channel. Please don't remove them.

  • @sohamsant
    @sohamsant 4 місяці тому +2

    its refreshing to see your video on youtube

  • @alishagoswami1458
    @alishagoswami1458 6 місяців тому +1

    Greg makes everything looks so simply❤

  • @MuhammadWaqas-lf3yp
    @MuhammadWaqas-lf3yp 3 місяці тому +4

    @Gregmat..
    Your old videos related to verbal reasoning strategies were very helpful..
    Plz re-upload them..
    Will be very grateful to you..

  • @paulofuokwu3137
    @paulofuokwu3137 8 місяців тому +11

    Thank you for the information tomorrow is my exam for the GRE

    • @saurabhsinha447
      @saurabhsinha447 8 місяців тому +2

      same lol. good luck

    • @paulofuokwu3137
      @paulofuokwu3137 8 місяців тому

      @@saurabhsinha447 how was your exam

    • @itsdjsoto
      @itsdjsoto 7 місяців тому

      @@paulofuokwu3137 how was it? I take mine in three days

    • @paulofuokwu3137
      @paulofuokwu3137 7 місяців тому

      @@itsdjsoto it was rescheduled for July 8th

    • @itsdjsoto
      @itsdjsoto 7 місяців тому

      @@paulofuokwu3137 why? & why so far lol

  • @Amir2Mahdi
    @Amir2Mahdi 2 місяці тому +1

    Gold videos. Thanks a lot Greg.

  • @hanny42157
    @hanny42157 6 місяців тому

    Thank you Greg!
    please make more videos like this!!

  • @MrSphericalUz
    @MrSphericalUz 8 місяців тому +2

    I need you, I love you please do not stop !

  • @mhshahadat7657
    @mhshahadat7657 6 місяців тому

    the most underrated teacher of this kind.....

  • @maggy13p
    @maggy13p 5 місяців тому +1

    Thank you so much for this @GregMat, but would you please please upload the old videos back?

  • @achakrabarty1115
    @achakrabarty1115 8 місяців тому +7

    The old videos in this channel were extremely helpful. Here in India many of us are facing issues with international payments, so i'm unable to subscribe to Gregmat. I have no other option. Please consider putting the videos up again.

    • @ptbauro
      @ptbauro 8 місяців тому +9

      This is inaccurate.
      I have been an Indian subscriber of Gregmat+ for a long time. One simply needs a functioning credit card or debit card.

    • @achakrabarty1115
      @achakrabarty1115 8 місяців тому +1

      @@ptbauro I am facing trouble paying with my credit card, which is functioning. Payments getting declined for all international subscriptions for 'security reasons'. My bank has no response or solution for it.

    • @ganeshreddy7502
      @ganeshreddy7502 7 місяців тому +1

      ​@@achakrabarty1115 I think u need to turn on permission for international payments

    • @kunalsharma7099
      @kunalsharma7099 6 місяців тому

      ​@@ganeshreddy7502Even I have an issue with the payment , even though I am using a debit card that has international transactions turned on when I try to do my payment it shows that in app purchases are not available on this card , If anyone has a solution to this please help

  • @julialarson2935
    @julialarson2935 7 місяців тому +6

    Gregmat, please re-upload your old videos somewhere. I NEED them to score well on the GRE asap. It's the best way I learn and I'm so sad they have been disabled.

    • @gregmat8036
      @gregmat8036  7 місяців тому +5

      Can you join GregMat+ for your prep?

  • @Lordskrip
    @Lordskrip 4 місяці тому

    You're the best, Greg!

  • @jaypanchal1172
    @jaypanchal1172 7 місяців тому +11

    ChatGPT had the following suggestions:
    Essay Evaluation
    Score: 4 out of 6
    Strengths:
    Clear Thesis and Position: The essay clearly states a position, disagreeing with the prompt and providing a nuanced perspective by acknowledging some negative impacts.
    Relevant Examples: The essay uses specific examples, such as communication through WhatsApp and the Dungeons and Dragons community, to support the argument.
    Structured Argument: The essay is well-organized with distinct paragraphs for each main point and a clear concession paragraph.
    Areas for Improvement:
    Depth of Analysis: The essay could benefit from a deeper analysis of the examples provided. Explaining how these examples specifically enhance human relationships could strengthen the argument.
    Addressing Counterarguments: While the essay acknowledges a counterpoint, it could further explore how these negative aspects might be mitigated or why they are less significant compared to the benefits.
    Variety of Examples: The essay could include a broader range of examples, such as how technology impacts professional relationships, educational interactions, or cross-cultural exchanges.
    Language and Style: There are a few areas where the language could be polished for greater clarity and impact. Avoiding repetition and using more varied sentence structures would improve readability.
    Suggestions for Improvement
    Expand Analysis:
    When discussing the benefits of technological communication (e.g., WhatsApp), elaborate on how this impacts the quality of relationships. Mention specific benefits like emotional support, maintaining long-distance relationships, or collaborative work.
    For the Dungeons and Dragons example, discuss how forming such communities contributes to mental well-being, a sense of belonging, and personal growth.
    Broaden Examples:
    Include examples from different areas of life. For instance, mention how technology has improved professional networking through platforms like LinkedIn or how it has facilitated cultural exchanges through social media and online forums.
    Discuss educational impacts, such as online learning platforms that connect students and teachers globally.
    Address Counterarguments More Fully:
    Explore the negative impacts in more depth. For example, discuss how reliance on digital communication might lead to misunderstandings or weakened social skills.
    Provide potential solutions or mitigating factors, such as the role of hybrid models combining virtual and face-to-face interactions or the importance of digital literacy in maintaining healthy relationships.
    Refine Language and Style:
    Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. For instance, the transition between the advantages and disadvantages sections could be more fluid.
    Avoid redundancy. Phrases like "First of all" and "Second of all" can be replaced with more varied transitions.
    Proofread for grammatical accuracy and to ensure sentences are concise and clear.
    Revised Excerpt Example
    Original:
    First of all, technological advancement has resulted in more benefits for our interconnectivity because, as a species, we are no longer constrained by distance.
    Revised:
    Firstly, technological advancements have greatly enhanced our ability to connect by eliminating the barriers of distance.

    • @bhavana6217
      @bhavana6217 6 місяців тому +8

      Following through will all these would result in the essay being extremely long

  • @manishaweeraddana5452
    @manishaweeraddana5452 Місяць тому

    How is his voice so calming lol
    Been on Gregmat for a while.. man's voice help me calm the nerves lol !

  • @ogbuamakajoy5634
    @ogbuamakajoy5634 7 місяців тому

    God bless you for this. It has really helped me!

  • @mdahsanulhimel
    @mdahsanulhimel 7 місяців тому +1

    Greg is back :')

  • @akankshatiwari1156
    @akankshatiwari1156 8 місяців тому +4

    GRE King is here... 👑

  • @imranhosen5598
    @imranhosen5598 6 місяців тому +2

    Please uplaod videos in prepswift writing section from conclusion template to Hedging language

  • @vitulbansal2425
    @vitulbansal2425 5 місяців тому

    Thank you so much for your insightful video.

  • @migmamember8742
    @migmamember8742 7 місяців тому +13

    On page 190 of the official verbal reasoning guide, I found a score 5 response to an issue essay with only 382 words. So perhaps word count is not as important now.

  • @worabaabban5155
    @worabaabban5155 7 місяців тому +1

    I miss you Greg! Would be taking the GRE again and would definitely subscribe to your website again

  • @maz1980s
    @maz1980s 29 днів тому

    AwEsOmE aWeSoMe ViDeO. KeEp iT uP.

  • @MukundChoudhary_
    @MukundChoudhary_ 2 місяці тому

    Shouldn't the 5th line be "more good than harm"?
    big fan btw the vocab quiz helped a lot in my last moment prep

  • @planetary-rendez-vous
    @planetary-rendez-vous 6 місяців тому +1

    I'm thinking I need to write extremely fast and be fluent in QWERTY in order to do this essay... first time I didn't have time to finish and got bamboozled by the keyboard!

    • @gregmat8036
      @gregmat8036  6 місяців тому +3

      Typing fast on a QWERTY keyboard definitely helps

  • @feeneyko
    @feeneyko 7 місяців тому

    Pure gold

  • @kalyanvejalla
    @kalyanvejalla 2 місяці тому

    amazing video!!

  • @isabelb8774
    @isabelb8774 3 місяці тому

    Thank you!

  • @ItsVarunContractor
    @ItsVarunContractor 6 місяців тому

    Love this!

  • @eveyliu7342
    @eveyliu7342 7 місяців тому

    Thank you Greg! I find this to be super clear.

  • @prarthanarout252
    @prarthanarout252 6 місяців тому

    Thank you so much!!!

  • @AlisonWang-v8e
    @AlisonWang-v8e 5 місяців тому +2

    Wish I have your mind

  • @raybuoy
    @raybuoy 5 місяців тому +1

    I have seen vidoes and courses recommending to go full-on ride or die with at least one spectrum of the prompt - this video says not to do that - which one should i go for? @GregMat

  • @ErnestKufuor-wx3xz
    @ErnestKufuor-wx3xz 3 місяці тому

    You could have replace application with 'social media platform'....

  • @Miscellaneous-C
    @Miscellaneous-C 8 місяців тому

    Gregg is backkk

  • @AmartyaKatge
    @AmartyaKatge 7 місяців тому

    Bring back your old videos Greg, pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.

  • @jorgeeduardo780
    @jorgeeduardo780 8 місяців тому

    Greg, your voice has changed!

  • @hrw4591
    @hrw4591 7 місяців тому

    Issue Essay Step by Step has great content, but after subscribing Greg Mat+, I didn't see these courses. Can you provide them? It seems like your UA-cam channel has also hidden other versions of the GRE Issue Essay Step by Step course

  • @harllow99
    @harllow99 3 місяці тому

    Everyone is talking about his old video. where do I find that?

  • @ManyManny-dp9yo
    @ManyManny-dp9yo 7 місяців тому

    Really helpful content, but more LOVE your voice though😂

  • @meem524
    @meem524 7 місяців тому

    Can someone tell if the Long passages are entirely cut from the shorter GRE? I took some free practice tests but none of them had any long RC

    • @jamesseldner6997
      @jamesseldner6997 7 місяців тому

      Pretty sure super long passages with 4-5 questions are gone

  • @umarhashmi3623
    @umarhashmi3623 7 місяців тому

    been a while you posted a video on YT

  • @TravisHLe
    @TravisHLe 6 місяців тому

    can you use algebra for this

  • @vashusolanki4881
    @vashusolanki4881 8 місяців тому

    This tutorial is aesthetic..

  • @StudyWithNika
    @StudyWithNika 6 місяців тому +1

    Sir please also gift us another GRE essay explanation the one in which you need to find holes your old GOAT video which contained both essays has been removed

  • @victoriap4291
    @victoriap4291 7 місяців тому

    Do you have to counter the counterargument?

    • @liamnguyen7654
      @liamnguyen7654 4 місяці тому +1

      no but it helps to add to the writing

  • @aditgoyal2659
    @aditgoyal2659 7 місяців тому

    There are no argument essays anymore right?
    Also, you are a walking grammarly with how you changed that second body paragraph's topic sentence wording

  • @영어컨텐츠-c5w
    @영어컨텐츠-c5w 3 місяці тому

    use mostly agree/disagree, dont use absolutely on sci topic

  • @dhruvekiyawat1567
    @dhruvekiyawat1567 2 місяці тому

    44:10

  • @makito106
    @makito106 7 місяців тому

    20:00

  • @mdmanowerhosen8217
    @mdmanowerhosen8217 5 місяців тому

    I THINK WE MISS A LOT ........... gregmat . please re open your old videos . earnestly i enjoyed your videos few years back and inspired ......................... , really depressed for your inconvenience

  • @akpc
    @akpc 6 місяців тому

    noice

  • @narruto_uzumaki
    @narruto_uzumaki 4 місяці тому +2

    bro talks like a guy in finance. i like it though.

  • @user-jm6gp2qc8x
    @user-jm6gp2qc8x 4 місяці тому

    uninterested and disinterested are different. former is being emotionless, latter is being neutral.

  • @vaidehipatel4159
    @vaidehipatel4159 6 місяців тому

    I would have definitely mentioned that it has privileged Asians to attend Lord Greg’s
    live classes, who cares about sleep even.

  • @EmooWang-c2x
    @EmooWang-c2x Місяць тому

    # Organization of the Issue Essay
    ## Introduction
    - **Hook** (generalization, anecdote, interesting fact, trend, quote, etc.)
    - Introduces the topic (nothing more); don't write your thesis or supporting idea here!
    - **Shift to Prompt**
    - Makes your essay more cohesive (makes it flow better); an abrupt shift to your thesis is awkward
    - **Thesis** (most important part of the essay...by far)
    - This baby is the boss that controls everything
    - The thesis you choose exists on a spectrum
    - I recommend “mostly agree” or “mostly disagree”
    - **Outline** (tells your reader how you’re going to structure your essay)
    - Don’t neglect this bad boy; academic readers like to know what’s coming
    ## Body Paragraph (two of them)
    - **Topic sentence that introduces your first reason that supports your thesis**
    - It is imperative that this introduces the overall idea of the paragraph (the “controlling” idea) and that it supports your thesis. The topic sentence is a mini thesis.
    - **Example**
    - You need a good example here, preferably from history, politics, economics, etc.
    - If you can’t think of one, use a good hypothetical.
    - No one wants to hear about Uncle Bob
    - **(Optional) Example 2**
    - All the same rules apply
    - Why two?
    - Further develops the idea
    - Increases word count
    - Discourages “storytelling”
    - **Development/Explanation**
    - You need to develop your ideas. You need to connect the reason to the thesis. You need to explain why this matters.
    - 2-3 sentences of development.
    - **Remember there are two of these!**
    ## Concession Paragraph (counterpoint)
    - **Topic sentence that introduces a counterpoint to your thesis**
    - Remember this is why we “mostly” agreed or disagreed. It leaves room for nuance.
    - **Example**
    - Same rules apply
    - **(Optional) Example 2**
    - Same rules apply
    - **Development/Explanation**
    - Same rules apply
    ## Conclusion
    - **Doesn’t actually matter much.**
    - I mean you need it. It can’t not exist.
    - But all you want to do is rephrase your thesis and your supporting ideas and wrap this baby up.

  • @anilmaharjan5644
    @anilmaharjan5644 8 місяців тому

    Sir yóu have omitted most of your gre videos on UA-cam channel

    • @deliquentshantz
      @deliquentshantz 8 місяців тому +6

      It is due to copyright issue with ETS

  • @zhiychen1626
    @zhiychen1626 5 місяців тому +3

    # Writing of the Essay
    ## Topic
    Technological advancements have had more negative impacts on human
    interaction and relationships than positive ones.
    Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
    with the statement and explain you reasoning / or the position you take. In
    developing and supporting you position, you should consider specific examples
    of how technological advancements have affected human interaction and
    relationships.
    ## Template
    ### Introduction
    #### Hook (Generalization, anecdote, interesting fact, trend, quote, etc)
    ##### Introduces the topic (nothing more): don’t write your thesis or supporting idea here!
    The past 20 years has engendered more human connectivity than all previous
    millennia of our species' existence.
    With SO much change in such a short period
    of time, determining whether this phenomenon has been largely positive or
    negative is difficult, if not impossible.
    #### Shift to prompt
    ##### Makes your essay more cohesive(make it flow better); an abrupt shift to your thesis is awkward
    The prompt takes the negative stance and
    argues that technological advancements have resulted in more harm than good.
    #### Thesis (most important part of the essay…by far)
    ##### This baby is the boss that controls everything
    In my opinion,
    ##### The thesis you choose exists on a spectrum(strongly agree, mostly agree, neutral, mostly disagree, strongly disagree)
    ##### Greg recommends “mostly agree” or “mostly disagree”
    I mostly disaguee with this view and believe that
    technological progression has improved our connectivity and relationships
    #### Outline (tells you reader how you’re going to structure your essay)
    ##### Don’t neglect this bad boy; academic readers like to know what’s coming(how many reasons/examples)
    for the following two reasons, though I do concede that recent advancements
    have unfortunately decreased our need for face-to-face connection.
    ### Body Paragraph 1
    #### Topic sentence that introduces your first reason that supports your thesis
    ##### It is imperative that this introduces the overall idea of the paragraph (the “controlling” idea) and that it supports your thesis. The topic is a mini thesis
    First of all. technological advancement has resulted in more benefits for our
    interconnectivity because, as species, we are no longer constrained by
    distance.
    #### Example 1
    ##### You need a good example here, preferably from history, politics, economics etc
    ##### If you can’t think of one, use a good hypothetical
    ##### No one wants to hear about Uncle Bob
    ##### The example should be 1: epecific and 2: support your idea
    For example, a Japanese 2 exchange student studying in New York City
    can communicate with her mother in Tokyo easily and effectively at no charge
    using an application like WhatsApp or Facebook.
    #### Example 2 (Optional)
    ##### All the same rules apply
    ##### Why 2
    ###### Further develops the idea
    ###### Increases word count
    ###### Discourages “story telling”
    ##### Can be a 'counterexample' of the example before
    In the past, this same student would
    have had no choice but to send a letter (which might arrive three weeks later)
    or call long distance at an exorbitant rate of dollars per minute.
    #### Development/Explanation
    ##### You need to develop your idea. You need to connect the reason to the thesis. You need to explain why this matters
    ##### 2-3 sentence of development is good enough
    The Earth is massive, and even if one were traveling at the maximum speed of a
    commercial jetliner, it would take nearly 24 hours to travel from end of the
    planet to the other. However, technology, at least from a communication point
    of view, has created a reality in which all of Earth's & billion inhabitants are
    effectively right next to each other, not constrained by distance in any
    meaningful way. The advantages of this leap cannot be overstated, from the way
    we interact with our families to the way we conduct business around the globe.
    #### Remember there are 2 of these!
    ### Body Paragraph 2
    Second of all, the progression of our technology has allowed not just for the
    ability to sustain our current relationships but also the capacity to form new
    ones and become part of distinct communities. For example, an individual from
    a small town in America might be partial to the roleplaying game Dungeons and
    Dragons and be able to cultivate this hobby a by joining a local league in a larger
    town that he discovered on the Internet. Thirty years ago, this individual would
    have found it challenging to engage with this hobby and perhaps would never
    have pursued it given the difficulty in locating likeminded peers. Humans have
    an inherent need to be part of a tribe, to be part of a group that shares their
    interests and passions. Technology makes this possible, particularly for those
    individuals with niche hobbies that are not necessarily shared by those closest to
    them. Such freedom of expression has led to millions of people thriving in life
    and finding their true callings.
    ### Concession Paragraph (counterpoint)
    #### Topic sentence that introduces a counterpoint to your thesis
    ##### Remember this is why we "mostly" agreed or disagreed. It leaves room for nuance
    However, I do concede that technology has led to the unfortunate consequence
    of people no longer feeling the need for face-to-face interaction.
    #### Example
    ##### Same rules apply
    For example,
    especially after the Covid-19 pandemic, millions (perhaps billions) of workers
    around the globe no longer deem it necessary to go to their office and meet their
    co-workers on a personal level. Instead, they can simply use a video
    conferencing app like Zoom or Google Meet.
    #### (Optional) Example 2
    ##### Same rules apply here
    In addition, the phenomenon of
    "video dating" is becoming increasingly popular, where a date is conducted
    entirely online rather than at a coffee shop or restaurant.
    #### Development / Explanation
    ##### Same rules apply again
    As referenced above,
    humans are extremely social animals. We have an instinctual need to be around
    other humans. Multiple studies have shown that if a human is deprived of
    contact with other members of the species, a host of physical and mental
    consequences result. Technology, in some ways, is undermining this
    evolutionary need, one that has been with us for hundreds of thousands of years.
    It is possible that we can adjust to the new paradigm, but it's doubtful that this
    adjustment can occur at the same rate of technological process. It is no surprise
    that we are seeing rising depression and anxiety levels around the world, even
    as our standards of living improve.
    ### Conclusion
    #### Doesn't actually matter much. I mean you need it. It can't not exist. But all you want to do is rephrase your thesis and your supporting ideas and wrap this baby up.
    In conclusion, while it is true that technological progress has eroded some of
    our connectivity, particularly our face-to-face interaction, the benefits of instant
    communication unrestricted by distance and forming connections with
    likeminded people clearly outweigh the cons.

  • @im.endangered
    @im.endangered 4 місяці тому +4

    Introduction
    • Hook (generalization, anecdote, interesting fact, trend, quote, etc.)
    o Introduces the topic (nothing more); don't write your thesis or supporting idea here!
    • Shift to Prompt
    o Makes your essay more cohesive (makes it flow better); an abrupt shift to your thesis is awkward
    • Thesis (most important part of the essay...by far)
    o This baby is the boss that controls everything
    o The thesis you choose exists on a spectrum
    o I recommend "mostly agree" or "mostly disagree"
    • Outline (tells your reader how you're going to structure your essay)
    o Don't neglect this bad boy; academic readers like to know what's coming
    Body Paragraph (two of them)
    • Topic sentence that introduces your first reason that supports your thesis
    • It is imperative that this introduces the overall idea of the paragraph (the "controlling” idea) and that it supports your thesis. The topic sentence is a mini thesis.
    • Example
    o You need a good example here, preferably from history, politics, economics, etc.
    o If you can't think of one, use a good hypothetical.
    o No one wants to hear about Uncle Bob
    • (Optional) Example 2
    o All the same rules apply
    o Why two?
     Further develops the idea
     Increases word count
     Discourages "storytelling"
    • Development/Explanation
    o You need to develop your ideas. You need to connect the reason to the thesis. You need to explain why this matters.
    o 2-3 sentences of development.
    • Remember there are two of these!
    Concession Paragraph (counterpoint)
    • Topic sentence that introduces a counterpoint to your thesis
    o Remember this is why we "mostly" agreed or disagreed. It leaves room for nuance.
    • Example
    o Same rules apply
    • (Optional) Example 2
    o Same rules apply
    • Development/Explanation
    o Same rules apply
    Conclusion
    • Doesn't actually matter much. I mean you need it. It can't not exist. But all you want to do is rephrase your thesis and your supporting ideas and wrap this baby up.