It's almost laughable that Zharok believed he was an ultimate killer but when Death came for him and his unit they became quivering hatchlings still inside their eggs
One of best A-I reads I've heard . Seriously . Well done . Still , there was no emotion in the experience . A human reader would have imparted that unmistakable sense of presence and emotion that A-I just can't deliver . Still , this really was one of the best A-I reads I've envountered . Good short-story concept . A series of short stories on the same overall topic would build out a "universe" well worth inhabiting ! Well written . If THAT was A-I _too_ , I can't speak to its aporopriateness . All I can relate to is my experience , and overall it was a net-positive 👍 .
bursting into flames, he looked up at their ships laughed, quietly sheathed his sword very quickly, looking at the ground while pointing at the ground with one hand & without looking up pointed the other hand above his head directly at the main ship, without any words spoken, the officer in charge of the ships sat nav video imaging knew exactly what the message was,,, without a word, "the rest of you are late for your own funeral, I have your new permanent quarters awaiting your arrival'', he then straddled a Harley Davidson that quickly & miraculously appeared from out of nowhere, & as he fired her up the roaring engine, of death echoed up as far as the under belly of the ships carriage as he very slowly rode away as if hoping to be followed, Ghost Rider had some new toys to play with.
No malice or pettiness here, I simply believe honesty and objective truth to be infinitely more important then feelings. Positives; -You generated some interesting foundational world building. -The beginnings of some character development. NEGATIVES; -Wild, over the top, overt verbosity. It felt as if you had an open Thesaurus, searching and cramming unneeded terms, tropes, and catch phrases, as a means to “intellectualize” the level of your writing. -Cliche machine. If you’re going to utilize, as your centerpiece storyline, the most timeworn, overworked, overused, if a hackneyed idiom had drunken, angry, philandering, incestuous, late afternoon, 45 minute revenge sex stand with the stalest, overtly mundane, glory days whoring, wildly and uncaringly mundane, overused sluty theme, birthing the anti-Christ of cliched, threadbare platitudes; “THE HUNTER HAD NOW BECOME THE PREY/HUNTED”……for the love of all GODS, ya gotta come at it from a different angle. That theme, conservatively created in the Pre-Paleolithic Age, is a concept that still appeals to people, but it’s absolutely paramount to early M. Night Shymalan “wtf did I just witness” originality, the shyte out of it You cliched the cliche, with cliched clicheness, and beat the living cliche out of the cliche with cliched cliche. Understand?
I am totally u impressed with the audible narrative. I don't know if it is a.i. or an actual human (which I doubt!) But it is so badly read and disjointed, it is as if the voice reading the story had never done it before, chopped sentences, rushed words, pauses in the wrong places, come on, Give me the narrative and let me read it, even I, an ordinary guy with normal education can read better than this! If it is a human, go learn how to give life to what you are reading!
I think all of these types of story are AI. I'm thinking of adding some of my stories as well, but I would definitely do some audible editing before I released it.
@@steverabson4049 Not quite all. I recall seeing one channel where some actual people read it! They even showed their faces at the beginning. *le gasp*
My personal guess? Earth has always had a strange worship of Death - the last stragglers may have turned to it for help, offering the slaughter of the enemy.
The only real similarity is the helmet and even that's not exactly like Darth Vader's helmet. He's a guy in Black armor with a black cape. I think you should have had a scythe personally.
Were there no more humans? Why did Death himself need to be there? All I've read, heard, or understood about Death, says that all he must do is touch you. Why the battle? Death is incorporeal, why not just appear, touch and move to the next? If there were no humans, why were the "executioners" sent? This entire thing is about as airtight as a screen door. I have just wasted 25 minutes of my life I cannot get back.
It's almost laughable that Zharok believed he was an ultimate killer but when Death came for him and his unit they became quivering hatchlings still inside their eggs
Azriel loves his humans why do you think the Angel of Death makes sure we aren't alone when we die.
GRIMM REAPER VS ALIENS 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
One of best A-I reads I've heard .
Seriously .
Well done .
Still , there was no emotion in the experience . A human reader would have imparted that unmistakable sense of presence and emotion that A-I just can't deliver . Still , this really was one of the best A-I reads I've envountered .
Good short-story concept . A series of short stories on the same overall topic would build out a "universe" well worth inhabiting !
Well written .
If THAT was A-I _too_ , I can't speak to its aporopriateness . All I can relate to is my experience , and overall it was a net-positive 👍 .
Death doesn't care for competition.
I once saw him kill three aliens in a bar with a pencil. A fucking *pencil*!
Who even does that?!
bursting into flames, he looked up at their ships laughed, quietly sheathed his sword very quickly, looking at the ground while pointing at the ground with one hand & without looking up pointed the other hand above his head directly at the main ship, without any words spoken, the officer in charge of the ships sat nav video imaging knew exactly what the message was,,, without a word, "the rest of you are late for your own funeral, I have your new permanent quarters awaiting your arrival'', he then straddled a Harley Davidson that quickly & miraculously appeared from out of nowhere, & as he fired her up the roaring engine, of death echoed up as far as the under belly of the ships carriage as he very slowly rode away as if hoping to be followed, Ghost Rider had some new toys to play with.
This video and this Twist ending with Ghost Rider would make a great short movie.
@MsKinnara 👌👍🙂
No malice or pettiness here, I simply believe honesty and objective truth to be infinitely more important then feelings.
Positives;
-You generated some interesting foundational world building.
-The beginnings of some character development.
NEGATIVES;
-Wild, over the top, overt verbosity. It felt as if you had an open Thesaurus, searching and cramming unneeded terms, tropes, and catch phrases, as a means to “intellectualize” the level of your writing.
-Cliche machine. If you’re going to utilize, as your centerpiece storyline, the most timeworn, overworked, overused, if a hackneyed idiom had drunken, angry, philandering, incestuous, late afternoon, 45 minute revenge sex stand with the stalest, overtly mundane, glory days whoring, wildly and uncaringly mundane, overused sluty theme, birthing the anti-Christ of cliched, threadbare platitudes;
“THE HUNTER HAD NOW BECOME THE PREY/HUNTED”……for the love of all GODS, ya gotta come at it from a different angle. That theme, conservatively created in the Pre-Paleolithic Age, is a concept that still appeals to people, but it’s absolutely paramount to early M. Night Shymalan “wtf did I just witness” originality, the shyte out of it You cliched the cliche, with cliched clicheness, and beat the living cliche out of the cliche with cliched cliche. Understand?
Great idea for a story. Thank you.
That's what I was thinking. Actually both original and BA. Pretty metal. 🤘🏼
That was awesome!
Very good story well done.
Death, you who lived as none is above you , I'm taking my souls back.
Oh-gawd, that's really bad!
This was another mere human... This was John Wick
No one can defeat death.
Jesus can
Bill and Ted did.
@wernerviehhauser94 😂
And don't forget the little boy in "6-string samurai!". He killed death
Yep dress a ninja up to look like death and while he’s being attacked the invisible ones kill the enemy 😂humans had 100 words to find the blind spots.
I think you meant hulls?? And com - not calm. So much more as well. Don't be lazy. View and correct before release
Annoying conviction - how about gnawing???
I am totally u impressed with the audible narrative. I don't know if it is a.i. or an actual human (which I doubt!) But it is so badly read and disjointed, it is as if the voice reading the story had never done it before, chopped sentences, rushed words, pauses in the wrong places, come on, Give me the narrative and let me read it, even I, an ordinary guy with normal education can read better than this! If it is a human, go learn how to give life to what you are reading!
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I think all of these types of story are AI. I'm thinking of adding some of my stories as well, but I would definitely do some audible editing before I released it.
@@steverabson4049 Not quite all. I recall seeing one channel where some actual people read it! They even showed their faces at the beginning. *le gasp*
Have you seen how you type? Hypocrite
Enjoy this one, too!
I've said it before I'll say it again, do one with Dracula!!!!
Of course death just shows up out of nowhere for no reason, why exactly does earth have this entiry and none of the other 100 planets did?
Death knows, unemployment and too much sparetime on Earth sucks.
@@tobiasnicol3115 yeah, fair enough
My personal guess? Earth has always had a strange worship of Death - the last stragglers may have turned to it for help, offering the slaughter of the enemy.
Because death is an earth entity genius 🤦♂️
Why does death look like Darth Vader
It's just a background image for the story. UA-cam requires you to have something playing on screen even though it's just audio story.
You mean why does Darth Vader look like death? Because of the image.
The only real similarity is the helmet and even that's not exactly like Darth Vader's helmet.
He's a guy in Black armor with a black cape.
I think you should have had a scythe personally.
This gives me a ghost team from cod feels. lol i liked it
Zharok F♤♡◇♧d Around And Found Out, period!
Were there no more humans? Why did Death himself need to be there? All I've read, heard, or understood about Death, says that all he must do is touch you. Why the battle? Death is incorporeal, why not just appear, touch and move to the next? If there were no humans, why were the "executioners" sent? This entire thing is about as airtight as a screen door. I have just wasted 25 minutes of my life I cannot get back.
Hahahahaha! Toobad!
And no link to the reddit page to read
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Getting sick of that one word, you channel is now gone.
It's amazing the trolls that lurk in the depths of you tube. Don't like what you heard....pffffft scroll.
777
What is "777"? Why not 7? Or 77? Your comment makes no sense
Another overly wordy story , which could have been told in have the time
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