Enjoyed it! About 30 min. in, they were preparing to face an incoming attack on the base; then it skipped to them APPROACHING a base, apparently on another planet. That was disorienting. Have to assume their defense of the first base was successful, since the account was skipped entirely! How did an alien commander become a lab rat? If she fell so far out of favor, why would her people heed anything she said? Need to iron out plot holes before posting, but nice effort!
It amazes me that in all these stories the alien women are awesome beauties, But from all the different worlds, they all are blue except a couple of green ones. And, for some reason they are in heat for human males. These writers need to get creative and stop copying the ideas of others.
Why doesn't the woman in the picture have scales? If they could bring in an evac transport filled with Marines (who apparently did nothing), why was Sgt. Holt sent out there with a squad of only three (including himself) to secure an entire area of operations? That's not just implausible, it's impossible. Nope. Can't finish it. Just ... NO ... NO ... NO ... NO !!!
Why do ALL the aliens have beautiful illuminescent blue skin? Why not dark green, orange I don't know futura for crying outloud or something. Imagination is a terrible thing to waste.
The ground was "Scared"? Don't you mean scarred? Debris has no "s" sound. "We 've got a Life one"? "secure this song for the Humans"? "what sounded like Please" not pleads"? "check the calms"? or comms? What is a "dotting task"? "sergent" not sargent? "her gaze shifting between the human two who had become ..."? "his finger tents on the trigger"? "...exploded in sparks and trappnal"? What is "trappnal? There are pauses in the wrong places. What is a "citrop"? "her expression awful"? "exchanged to determine glance"? PLEASE READ AND LISTEN TO YOUR STORIES -BEFORE- PUTTING IT ONLINE.
Those mistakes made me think it's AI reading the script. The voice speaks English fluently until it doesn't. These mispronounced words and wrong wording are the reason to me, it should have been AI. But clearly its not. I'm glad you posted the corrections. Otherwise, ppl like me wouldn't know. Jmo. Thank you. ❤
This is such a weirdo channel... What's with the almost universial theme (pun intended) of badass-human-male-saves-sexy-alien-girl (And the AI art and voicesbare likewise strange and lazy.) It boggles my mind that there is almost daily vids posted, each of which are... What? 'Human supremacist'? Most of the few that I've paid any attention to re-use some... Lets call them '1930's era central European tropes.' Why does this keep coming up on my feed? Ugh.
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Enjoyed it! About 30 min. in, they were preparing to face an incoming attack on the base; then it skipped to them APPROACHING a base, apparently on another planet. That was disorienting. Have to assume their defense of the first base was successful, since the account was skipped entirely! How did an alien commander become a lab rat? If she fell so far out of favor, why would her people heed anything she said? Need to iron out plot holes before posting, but nice effort!
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❤ Awesome Story ❤
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It amazes me that in all these stories the alien women are awesome beauties, But from all the different worlds, they all are blue except a couple of green ones. And, for some reason they are in heat for human males. These writers need to get creative and stop copying the ideas of others.
Why doesn't the woman in the picture have scales?
If they could bring in an evac transport filled with Marines (who apparently did nothing), why was Sgt. Holt sent out there with a squad of only three (including himself) to secure an entire area of operations? That's not just implausible, it's impossible.
Nope. Can't finish it. Just ... NO ... NO ... NO ... NO !!!
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Why do ALL the aliens have beautiful illuminescent blue skin? Why not dark green, orange I don't know futura for crying outloud or something. Imagination is a terrible thing to waste.
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The ground was "Scared"? Don't you mean scarred? Debris has no "s" sound. "We 've got a Life one"? "secure this song for the Humans"? "what sounded like Please" not pleads"? "check the calms"? or comms? What is a "dotting task"? "sergent" not sargent? "her gaze shifting between the human two who had become ..."? "his finger tents on the trigger"? "...exploded in sparks and trappnal"? What is "trappnal? There are pauses in the wrong places. What is a "citrop"? "her expression awful"? "exchanged to determine glance"? PLEASE READ AND LISTEN TO YOUR STORIES -BEFORE- PUTTING IT ONLINE.
Those mistakes made me think it's AI reading the script.
The voice speaks English fluently until it doesn't. These mispronounced words and wrong wording are the reason to me, it should have been AI. But clearly its not.
I'm glad you posted the corrections. Otherwise, ppl like me wouldn't know.
Jmo.
Thank you.
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If this is done by AI we won’t need to panic about it wiping us out any time soon.
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Story line excellent, editor and script writers need "human " input.
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Good story but obviously not read by a human.
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AI voice needs lesson in pronunciation and language verses printed word.
This is such a weirdo channel... What's with the almost universial theme (pun intended) of badass-human-male-saves-sexy-alien-girl (And the AI art and voicesbare likewise strange and lazy.)
It boggles my mind that there is almost daily vids posted, each of which are... What? 'Human supremacist'?
Most of the few that I've paid any attention to re-use some... Lets call them '1930's era central European tropes.'
Why does this keep coming up on my feed? Ugh.