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КОМЕНТАРІ • 262

  • @msumungo
    @msumungo 3 місяці тому +115

    This is absolutely written by an AI.

    • @wilburcollins8342
      @wilburcollins8342 3 місяці тому +8

      How did it not put palpable in there?

    • @happyzahn8031
      @happyzahn8031 3 місяці тому +21

      It was going so well, as well as an ai can do, until it started confusing rebels and not rebels and switching things out in the rebel base and the nearby outpost and the forest, etc.

    • @SoloClone
      @SoloClone 3 місяці тому +3

      Didn't know they could write stories.
      It's most likely someone's story that an audio a.i. is reading it, and it makes mistakes in language

    • @DexZabeth
      @DexZabeth 3 місяці тому +7

      That doesn't mean it's not a good story though

    • @SilvaFox
      @SilvaFox 3 місяці тому +8

      ​@@DexZabeth he was in an escape pod and lost life support and blacked out. Was in another escape pod lost life support and blacked out. Was in a small fighter lost life support and nearly blacked out. How many glints of metal in the corners of your eyes can you see in one story? The premise of this story would be good but this presentation was probably one of the worst ones I've heard on here.

  • @BarakIII
    @BarakIII Місяць тому +6

    I've listened to dozens of these HFY stories on youtube and this one has huge gaps in it like none I have heard before. It's a shame too because there's a good plot here that could have made for a really good story. The premise of an alien girl who believes humans are monsters who is then saved by humans is the bare bones of potentially a good story.

  • @deann7898
    @deann7898 3 місяці тому +22

    the author sure loves to use the word "acrid"

  • @Dranok1
    @Dranok1 3 місяці тому +41

    "The young Nausican..."?!! I laughed out loud! One of the most violent, combative races in modern Star Trek used as a small race who are frightened if humans?!?

    • @happyzahn8031
      @happyzahn8031 3 місяці тому +3

      Yep, pretty dumb the Ai re-used that race.

    • @markcoutts7750
      @markcoutts7750 3 місяці тому +1

      😔 sad ! Isn't it!
      🕊️🗺️🕊️💯👁️☮️🦫🇨🇦🫂

    • @markrahm6900
      @markrahm6900 3 місяці тому

      Nausican, afraid of human? Isn't that like a Klingon being afraid of a Ferengi?

    • @theducklinghomesteadandgar6639
      @theducklinghomesteadandgar6639 3 місяці тому +2

      How exactly do we tell or know it’s AI?
      A serious question I’m not trying to argue is or is not, I want to know how to differentiate. Of course I’ve not seen the latest Star Trek so that would not help me. Is there a way to tell no matter the content???

    • @IlsaGalvin
      @IlsaGalvin 3 місяці тому

      I took would like to know

  • @swiftmatic
    @swiftmatic 3 місяці тому +13

    Good plot, but lots of inconsistencies.

    • @rh906
      @rh906 3 місяці тому

      That's "AI" for ya. You have to be the editor/proofreader since it doesn't really have intelligence, it just spits out patterns you have to parse. Meaning intelligent people get another tool for their work and dumb people will get more dumb.

  • @bojnebojnebojne
    @bojnebojnebojne Місяць тому +2

    I don't care about inconsistencies or holes in a plot, holes in plot leave room for imagination and interpretations,
    I found it to be a very captivating, good and intriguing story and i would love to see it play out as an actual movie.

    • @sfrees
      @sfrees Місяць тому +3

      If you have not seen the movie "Enemy Mine" You should see it. It's a masterpiece of Sci-Fi film making.

    • @bojnebojnebojne
      @bojnebojnebojne Місяць тому

      @@sfrees Thank You, i will look it up and check it out :)

  • @GeorgeWashingtonLaserMusket
    @GeorgeWashingtonLaserMusket Місяць тому +2

    Both the escape pod and their fighter ship seems to have unreliable life support systems lol.

  • @DraculaSWBF2
    @DraculaSWBF2 3 місяці тому +2

    Young girl huddled in the corner. "Play dom-jot human?", she said.

  • @StephenMaite
    @StephenMaite 3 місяці тому +7

    pls help the little princess tell her humans are good people

  • @thomasjoseph5876
    @thomasjoseph5876 3 місяці тому +33

    Wow
    This was a lesson in how to allow an AI to destroy a decent story.
    This is like the 4th story I watched that had this issue.
    There won't be a 5th.

    • @rdkater
      @rdkater 3 місяці тому +1

      its very boring

    • @salamanca1954
      @salamanca1954 3 місяці тому

      You've made it through 4 of these things!? You must be a glutton for punishment. One dose of this garbage was enough for me.

    • @kitsinu1
      @kitsinu1 3 місяці тому +3

      Thank you for the explanation for why Mira had a father who died and another later on. An AI with a lack of continuity explains this and other problems.
      And I agree, this will kill the entire genre.

    • @bluestarthestar
      @bluestarthestar 2 місяці тому

      Yeah. Wish I could block channels

  • @jaytoser5212
    @jaytoser5212 3 місяці тому +5

    I very much like the background image of this story and others in this series. Please give credit where credit is due: who / what / is /are the artists?

    • @darkutopia0423
      @darkutopia0423 3 місяці тому +2

      I like this image as well, but my guess is that it is AI-generated, there are some tell-
      tail signs, like the double exposure on the thumb,

    • @darkutopia0423
      @darkutopia0423 3 місяці тому +1

      I am wondering if the story itself is AI-generated as well,

    • @happyzahn8031
      @happyzahn8031 3 місяці тому +1

      @@darkutopia0423 Definitely AI generated. Wasn't too inconsistent until the rebel base when it fell apart a lot with all kinds of scene jumping and teleporting and non-rebel outpost and nonsense about bio weapon made to kill the species that created it...bwahaha. Loved the blue vial of antidote, so handy to find one of those lying around and it being oral administered.

  • @kevinford2644
    @kevinford2644 5 днів тому

    I guess the girl has multiple fathers. One killed on the first Noresican ship and then another father who shows up on the second? First no one in the corridor and then Olivia is in it?

  • @marshamercer876
    @marshamercer876 3 місяці тому +3

    😂 I had to laugh when the creator of this channel said subscribe or I will take your dog. Which one 😂

    • @happyzahn8031
      @happyzahn8031 3 місяці тому +2

      your hot dog. he is very hungry because he has no money from these AI stories read by AI.

  • @stephenriggs-pb7wo
    @stephenriggs-pb7wo 3 місяці тому +1

    This story had potential but fell far short. One sentence your running for safety to board a starship, the next your running through the jungle to escape the bad guys. You then come across a giant snake which you go around and never hear about again. you then find a hidden bunker that for no reason opens for you. These gaps and jumps, along with others make no sense and ruin the whole story.

  • @jesussaldana4558
    @jesussaldana4558 3 місяці тому +1

    Human proofreader would help, anyone saying proofread, why don't you volunteer to proofread and make sure the story is fluid...this is great concept but a bit of fixing up can bring it to the next level.

  • @stanleymorgan2920
    @stanleymorgan2920 3 місяці тому +4

    To start out someone might want to give a rate of 88 out 100 but this actually rates a 96 of 100....I would love to see this as a movie

    • @flitsertheo
      @flitsertheo 2 місяці тому

      Yes, with Steven Seagal as the main character.

  • @HappiDaz
    @HappiDaz 3 місяці тому +1

    "Michael surged forward"? Waves surge; humans don't.

    • @johnsanford3596
      @johnsanford3596 3 місяці тому +1

      Have you ever seen NFL linemen move on the snap?

    • @flitsertheo
      @flitsertheo 2 місяці тому

      Human waves do surge ...

  • @Immortal-Headcase
    @Immortal-Headcase 3 місяці тому +1

    This makes no sense. The small weak aliens fled the station in fear because of pirates and left Mira because she was useless. One human is sent to salvage the "derelict" station, which now also has a huge carnivorous monster on, left by the aliens so they can kidnap her? Now, suddenly, the small weak aliens who think humans are a vicious barbarian and fear them are now big act like vicious barbarians who kill humans on sight. Then the father was dead, then alive. I'm confused and give up trying to make sense of this nonsense.

  • @rahrah5091
    @rahrah5091 2 місяці тому

    And at 28:00 we have Plot armor. Get your Plot Armor here.

  • @thorenshammer
    @thorenshammer 3 місяці тому +1

    88, I love good space based sci-fi, and this fits. Thank you.

  • @lancelittrell369
    @lancelittrell369 2 місяці тому

    That was... intersesting. Disjointed holes in the storyline, but to what purpose? Confusing jumble of coincidences and... luck?

  • @johnrutka8658
    @johnrutka8658 Місяць тому

    Although it was a bit confusing at times I loved the story. It had a great ending as well. 👍👍
    88
    EDIT: One question: Was the child's name Mira or Mirror. 🤔
    (The Closed Captioning alternated between the two.)

  • @johnhorton4436
    @johnhorton4436 3 місяці тому

    This Guy was Really Lucky to Stumble Upon a Ship Filled with Ancient But Still Highly Advanced Weaponry

    • @flitsertheo
      @flitsertheo 2 місяці тому

      And still working after decades ? Centuries ?

  • @shaiken2021
    @shaiken2021 3 місяці тому

    inticing story - just a few too many "...and Jack leaped..." IYKYK

  • @adhdrebel982
    @adhdrebel982 3 місяці тому

    For me it's a good escape from nows reality of crooked politicians trying for a take over ...An 88 is worthy of this chapter of story please continue with storyline and characters .

  • @joelceda3500
    @joelceda3500 3 місяці тому

    My suspension of disbelief died when there was an actual locl with tumblers that he could pick.
    ON A SPACESHIP.

    • @rh906
      @rh906 3 місяці тому

      Why change what works?

  • @glenfitch6813
    @glenfitch6813 3 місяці тому +1

    Wow the Deus Ex Machina, the half brother trope, the plot holes... Either AI or kid writing this

    • @SiXiam
      @SiXiam 3 місяці тому

      Worse, it is usually reddit.

  • @The411
    @The411 3 місяці тому +4

    story has potential. there's only so much you can do in 40 minutes.

  • @stephenkywong
    @stephenkywong 2 місяці тому

    Unsatisfying ending for me but that’s subjective

  • @edwardsolomon1951
    @edwardsolomon1951 Місяць тому

    Don't understand all the hate in the comments. It's a story about a man saving a child alien girl. Not hard to follow. People need to use their imaginations.

    • @falsehope4421
      @falsehope4421 5 днів тому +1

      It's because it's an ai generated story, which honestly isn't that bad tbh considering how easy it is to give a cool "script" to an ai and it'll give you a full on story that's fairly well written, so tbh at least some of the hate probably comes from people who are losing their jobs to robots and ai, and another large part are probably the people that think terminator is an accurate demonstration of modern day ai

  • @yeomantrader9505
    @yeomantrader9505 3 місяці тому +2

    I was amused by the story. "I could do better myself, but okay." was my thought. Until, Mira attacks a dozen rebels with a stolen blaster. "Please please make it stop"

  • @joakimportnoff1093
    @joakimportnoff1093 3 місяці тому

    For an IA it's damn impressive, even if you don't understand that IA to day is like about 12 year old in brain power but like 2-3 years ago it was like 4. Just you wait an other 10 years and see. + try and read an novel from the 1970's and see if that's any better then this. I for 1 liked this.

  • @ilovehmetal
    @ilovehmetal 2 місяці тому

    I smell a law suit 😂

  • @phillipmaxfield7516
    @phillipmaxfield7516 3 місяці тому

    It was a good story I enjoyed it tremendously

  • @robertvirnig638
    @robertvirnig638 3 місяці тому

    I've never knowingly read an AI story but this must be one. There are so many plot holes. Things conveniently appear from nowhere starting with the protagonist himself. How did he arrive at the station?

  • @froztbytes
    @froztbytes 3 місяці тому +4

    Next time, proofread this before posting it.

    • @rh906
      @rh906 3 місяці тому

      Why? It's all about the views and getting people to comment.

  • @MrStarTraveler
    @MrStarTraveler 2 місяці тому

    The story had plot holes. What happened to Olivia Tompson. And the Norsican doctor. There were also continuity issues.

  • @nemesisastraea6659
    @nemesisastraea6659 3 місяці тому

    Fun rollercoaster of a story.

  • @MrRymax07
    @MrRymax07 3 місяці тому

    88 brilliant I was just about to log off and this popped up I'm now on that one story a subscriber

  • @forrestpierson3770
    @forrestpierson3770 3 місяці тому +8

    There were too many unexplained gaps, a discontinued flow of events. Needs desperate cleansing.

    • @KOS762
      @KOS762 3 місяці тому +1

      yep, they went from getting onto the ship to planting explosives. When did they get those? I too, feel a lot of the story is missing.

    • @rh906
      @rh906 3 місяці тому

      It's still better than what the average human is capable of. lol

  • @-opresiet-1414
    @-opresiet-1414 2 місяці тому

    When a 10 year old uses chatGPT to write a story in another language, which is then translated back into English using Google translate.

  • @francism9782
    @francism9782 2 місяці тому

    Play Dom-Jot humaaaaaan...

  • @GregDV
    @GregDV 3 місяці тому

    88 Love this short story, very gripping all the way to the end.

  • @rhondawolfgangbelluscio2548
    @rhondawolfgangbelluscio2548 2 місяці тому

    88 I liked this story even tho I occasionally got lost in the telling! Needs some clarifying for sure. New subscriber from Pa.

  • @masterassassinaltairibn-la4698
    @masterassassinaltairibn-la4698 2 місяці тому

    Ah yes another long lost cousin of blue guys from the avatar movies

  • @antitunnelvizie5877
    @antitunnelvizie5877 3 місяці тому

    Captain we found a new live form (Captain : wat is it!!?) it is Space Simp Pro Captain ! Number One: God thanks for that !!

  • @wngimageanddesign9546
    @wngimageanddesign9546 3 місяці тому +7

    Damn it, I'll never get back those 40 minutes wasted from my life!

    • @happyzahn8031
      @happyzahn8031 3 місяці тому +2

      Gotta listen at minimum 1.5x speed.

  • @mondaview5565
    @mondaview5565 3 місяці тому

    All the aliens kidnapped people and children and changed them into creatures.....

  • @kmccabe1962
    @kmccabe1962 3 місяці тому +1

    This is fantastic- very good AI - the best I’ve heard

  • @lovelyjubbly1010
    @lovelyjubbly1010 3 місяці тому +1

    its a story, this is a computer, you know with a screen, not a gramaphone! I'd rather see it than hear about it!

  • @nickpond9337
    @nickpond9337 3 місяці тому

    VERY GOOD STORY , THANK YOU , so the Red Cross on Her Blue Cheek was a Singe ! of Her Rank OR Important ' s with in the Royal Family ! ?

  • @rosslangerak8361
    @rosslangerak8361 Місяць тому

    Is the girl's name Mirror or Mira?

  • @J.Young808
    @J.Young808 3 місяці тому

    Sounds like Star Wars

  • @marcables-ls8rg
    @marcables-ls8rg Місяць тому

    A 15 minute story stretched to 40 minutes by the sheer number of unnecessary words

  • @Mary-mq1ty
    @Mary-mq1ty 2 місяці тому

    Veey nuce stiry great read thank you❤😂🎉😢😮😅😊C.S.A.BABY

  • @GayaGreen
    @GayaGreen Місяць тому

    But it is a very good story...

  • @Mary-mq1ty
    @Mary-mq1ty 2 місяці тому

    GOOD STORY REALLY NICE TRAD THANK YOU FOR PROFF RRADING IT FIRST ❤😂🎉😢😮😅😊C.S.A.BABY

  • @rockielida9551
    @rockielida9551 3 місяці тому

    The story keep me listen. Enjoyed it very much. 88

  • @strandofeternity
    @strandofeternity 2 місяці тому +1

    I liked it, so screw yall trash talkers lol. Jkjk it was a bit hard to follow but the idea was definitely there. Good job, just work of making the stories make a little more sense and tie in better with each other.

  • @geoffmarr7526
    @geoffmarr7526 3 місяці тому +2

    Uh huh. Robot retread. AI regurge.

  • @glatnip
    @glatnip 3 місяці тому

    88 great story...

  • @martinschoech8156
    @martinschoech8156 3 місяці тому

    Continuity of content was not on the list of most important topics when written.

  • @Gordon705
    @Gordon705 3 місяці тому

    If you are going to just read me a story, I'll meet you at the library. UA-cam is a video website.

  • @Pauldavison-xt5xj
    @Pauldavison-xt5xj 2 місяці тому

    88. Whether written by AI, or human, still a good read, and I don't particularly like sci-fi

  • @hands_of_wolverine
    @hands_of_wolverine 3 місяці тому

    88 thank u for a great story

  • @scottbraun2457
    @scottbraun2457 3 місяці тому

    Eighty-eight 88...
    This was rather well done. Very nice.

  • @CrystalSouth
    @CrystalSouth 3 місяці тому

    i like it

  • @bee4pcgoldrule.007
    @bee4pcgoldrule.007 3 місяці тому

    No agenda here nope.

  • @larryselkirk426
    @larryselkirk426 3 місяці тому +2

    Too many superlatives.

    • @timdunn2257
      @timdunn2257 3 місяці тому

      Ai authors use far too many adverbs and adjectives.

    • @bloombloom271
      @bloombloom271 2 місяці тому

      This has more holes than Swiss cheese, which also has its merits.
      I think this is fun.

  • @sunshinehell
    @sunshinehell 3 місяці тому

    soooo many inconsistencies. so many issues to address. So do you just approach tropes without logic and plot consistency and expect it to be...I dunno...good?

  • @terryhayward7905
    @terryhayward7905 3 місяці тому

    Not a bad effort, the story line was good, the action ok, but there was no conclusion to the story, it just stopped in mid flow with the shortest possible " the end".

  • @yvindwestersund9720
    @yvindwestersund9720 3 місяці тому +1

    You have got to stop saying
    You have reached the end of the story
    End the story whit sorting that actually have meaning and nor just a cop-out of maybe this ore that
    MAKE A ENDING THAT ACTUALLY WORKS AND MEAN SOMETHING
    Then we will happily listen and go along with what you want and think about this
    But an ending like WHAT IF ORE SOMETHING
    Ain't what we want
    Get it together and you will have a massive impact and audience
    Just saying 🇧🇻

    • @KOS762
      @KOS762 3 місяці тому

      ?what?

    • @yvindwestersund9720
      @yvindwestersund9720 3 місяці тому

      @@KOS762 my point exactly you don't get it and so do everyone else also

    • @KOS762
      @KOS762 3 місяці тому

      @@yvindwestersund9720 Yep, I also agree... Giant parts of the story are missing, leading us to wonder, WTF are they talking about. The story went from a space pod with no life support, to planting explosives. ?What?

  • @michaeldesmondwoods3193
    @michaeldesmondwoods3193 3 місяці тому

    What happened to Mira? 88

  • @danlambert1061
    @danlambert1061 3 місяці тому

    Written by an AI. So many holes in the plot, along with gaping inconsistencies, rendered a potentially good story to mediocre at best.

  • @montejulian5851
    @montejulian5851 2 місяці тому

    I agree with a previous post that this was most likely generated by A I. I miss the days of radio drama but with all of the woke sh#t it is very unlikely that a decent story would make it to be heard.

  • @williambusman79
    @williambusman79 3 місяці тому

    Dang

  • @purplebrain7421
    @purplebrain7421 3 місяці тому

    The story was very inconsistent.

  • @rickslingerland1155
    @rickslingerland1155 3 місяці тому

    Would you accept a short story written by a human?

  • @corneliusantonius3108
    @corneliusantonius3108 3 місяці тому

    Ripped of from one of the alien Movies.

  • @deadlykitten4471
    @deadlykitten4471 Місяць тому

    This is definitely ai

  • @popeyeandthejeep7459
    @popeyeandthejeep7459 3 місяці тому +1

    The story has potential. To rushed

  • @Michael-cu8xk
    @Michael-cu8xk 3 місяці тому +1

    Not bad considering that I hate AI's88😂😂😂😂l🖖 Live long an prosper

  • @zainengalerion6832
    @zainengalerion6832 2 місяці тому

    This is like a badly written d20 intro by 12 year olds... where is his ship? Why is there a giant hungry monster on a space station...? Why did she go from cowering from the scary human to clinging to him...? Got to the tattoo part in the shuttle then bailed. Fking awful...

    • @flitsertheo
      @flitsertheo 2 місяці тому

      From cowering to clinging, she is a (very young) woman, seek no logic.

  • @athanmeade2114
    @athanmeade2114 3 місяці тому

    Poor plot development but decent story if you can tolerate the gaps and utter bs
    Overall 2.5 out of 5

  • @serialcrusher2244
    @serialcrusher2244 3 місяці тому

    Pretty bad story. Really confusing. Main bad guy is dead set on killing his princess step-sister to over throw the government. But trades her for the chance to kill an annoying hero instead. That and people who were dead kept coming back to life.

  • @stevetessendorf7378
    @stevetessendorf7378 Місяць тому

    Crap. How does he pick a lock while actively being beaten? Too bad I can't block this channel from my phone. It's a danger to the average listeners IQ.

  • @jeffreylewis2089
    @jeffreylewis2089 Місяць тому

    very disjointed plot line. Trite clichés through out...

  • @mariettehamel12358
    @mariettehamel12358 3 місяці тому

    This is just "a story"... nothing to do with "reality!...

  • @jawesomes6939
    @jawesomes6939 2 місяці тому

    Ugh the story started to jump and get more outta wack. 🙄

  • @sparksnmagic8695
    @sparksnmagic8695 3 місяці тому

    Nice story. Keep up the good work.

  • @satava6680
    @satava6680 Місяць тому +1

    gtfo with this low effort ai bs

  • @lomgshorts3
    @lomgshorts3 3 місяці тому

    I would find a better story line if I were you. Too many well abused cliches to sound believable. Too E.E. "Doc" Smith like.

  • @Madjuls
    @Madjuls 3 місяці тому

    A good story.

  • @meta_pyx
    @meta_pyx Місяць тому

    Ridiculous story

  • @Gerry-cg6kr
    @Gerry-cg6kr 3 місяці тому

    Lovely lips

  • @ccmegalodon84
    @ccmegalodon84 3 місяці тому

    Fake engagement, didn't like any "88" posts

  • @101Flinx
    @101Flinx 3 місяці тому

    this is total crap I want a refund

  • @mhansome1
    @mhansome1 3 місяці тому

    What BS.

  • @apheramakow5289
    @apheramakow5289 2 місяці тому

    Well that was a nice story sure there was a lot of brutal deaths on each side but still that was kind of heartwarming he really cared for that little girl

    • @flitsertheo
      @flitsertheo 2 місяці тому

      It was more an obsession. Could turn unsavoury.

  • @H8FULL1
    @H8FULL1 3 місяці тому

    Obviously written by ai.
    Horribly !