A Mechanic Helped a Woman in the Rain. Two Days Later, a Helicopter Landed in Front of His House.

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You start the story, then go back and repeat it from further back. This makes no sense other than extending the time of telling in an irrelevant way.

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Also, the way you tell the story, the garage is in the distance, and then suddenly, the stuck car is close and appears in the garage. Your telling makes it implausible and senseless. You could do it so much better. The voice is pleasant and persuasive for a feel-good story, but telling the story needs a lot of work.